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    RadicalRodent

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    #55663   2007-11-18 09:46 GMT      
    You lay there quietly with no movement
    The cold breeze flays in by the endless fan
    my eyes studying your face in a endless time phase
    You lay there quietly with no movement
    I'm scared now you look like a empty shale with no soul
    You lay there quietly with no movement
    I wish I was nicer to you before you became this
    You lay there quietly with no movement
    Your skin is becoming pale, to pale I'm scared now
    You lay there quietly with no movement

    RacoonClingon

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    #55664   2007-11-18 09:50 GMT      
    are you emo

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    #55665   2007-11-18 17:53 GMT      
    depressing
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