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    LoneBoat

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    #186201   2008-05-20 19:46 GMT      
    FAIRYTALE SHATTERED

    Stealing this moment just with you,
    Although my chance already flew.
    Vexed knowing you won't meet me here,
    Emptiness except for this fear.
    Doomed to morning dreams, fallen dew.

    Left with eyes washed in icy blue.
    Embarassed that such feelings grew,
    Sorry that I let you grow dear,
    Stealing this moment.

    Living a life that I shall rue,
    Opposite of what I wished true.
    Silk dreams transparent, broken, sheer,
    Stolen fantasies, never clear.
    Echoes of life I never knew,
    Stealing this moment.

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    #186202   2008-05-20 19:58 GMT      
    I never realized it was an acrostic! That makes it even better (if possible ). That was really good. It was so regretful and mournful. (At least that's what I thought. I may be a bad poem interpretator) ((Total parentheses overkill)).

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    #186203   2008-05-20 22:15 GMT      
    Lovely poetry by a lovely lady, and what more is there to say, the queen of acrostics lives.

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    #186204   2008-05-20 22:39 GMT      
    What's happening to me? I did not enjoy this one bit. Maybe some prune juice will help.

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    #186205   2008-05-20 23:08 GMT      
    fairytale shattered huh? well perhaps you should tell the person you like that you like them...huh? maybe? that's just assuming that all this poetry comes from a real place...then again not everyone is as crazy as me...Anyways I like this trying to do one of these makes me appreciate the skill here

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    #186206   2008-05-21 12:20 GMT      
    hatched from eggs
    the happy chickens grow out
    they love all the places to peck
    ...what a dream come true.
    but why is my buddy dinner?
    we had so much more to peck.
    and this morning i hear the rooster
    what makes him so lucky?..
    maybe its the eggs
    maybe there is more.
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